Would appreciate your feedback, does this say go or no?

[Jorli]

I'm hoping the website is close to completion, although that might depend on the feedback I get here.

If you have a minute, please click on the link and have a look. Does it say go or no to you? Is there anything you might change or that is missing? I'd greatly appreciate your feedback as long as it is constructive.

Thanks-J

http://www.snowrideadventures.com/index.php

 

[AkHockey10]

From what I can see, Looks good to me!

 

[Mafesto]

SnowRide Adventures has nearly 22,000 hectares of the most spectacular riding on the planet. Shred limitless powder on massive glaciers in the high alpine, destroy terrain-riddled sub-alpine and navigate wicked old growth trees to elevate your boondocking skills, the adventure is literally endless.


Greenies will use "Shred & Destroy" to make us look like villians trying to ruin Gods creation.

I would consider alternate verbiage.

 

[Arctic Thunder]

Maf's probably right, shred and destroy would be a couple words people wouldn't like. I know what you mean but they may not. But honestly I don't know if I would worry about it to much. Shred is a snowboarder term anyway.

Site looks pretty good. Noticed the home page the image on the right was blank. Might be my web security system not loading it. Several other images were blank also.

Otherwise nice site, looks like it's put together well.

Thunder

 

[Jorli]

Thanks, I was looking for an alternative to the words ride, explore, etc....there is too much of that in there already. Definitely note worthy, I'll re-think the verbiage. Thanks!

As for the photos not loading or leaving blanks, that is something I'll look into. There should be a full page background skin on every page.

Thanks!-J

SnowRide Adventures has nearly 22,000 hectares of the most spectacular riding on the planet. Shred limitless powder on massive glaciers in the high alpine, destroy terrain-riddled sub-alpine and navigate wicked old growth trees to elevate your boondocking skills, the adventure is literally endless.


Greenies will use "Shred & Destroy" to make us look like villians trying to ruin Gods creation.

I would consider alternate verbiage.

 

[Racer220]

I like it. All the pics and backgrounds loaded for me. Ditto on wording in those 2 spots. Other than that I think the info is there to get prospective clients interested in signing up.

 

[bholmlate]

Jorli

I think Arctic Thunder & Mafesto have a good point. Even though those terms are widely used in our sport of snowmobiling and snowboarding they do conjure up negative imagery in some peoples minds and when you are dealing with the environment that is never a good idea.

Its tough using words that everyone else uses and still try to set yourself apart from the group. I hate to be politically correct all the time as well but it is something you have to be aware of when working in the public arena. Even the a word like "carve" can invoke negative imagery. You could always start a post and ask people for words to substititue for the two words to see if the snowmobile community can help itself out a little. A phrase like "Link countless lines in prestine powder fields" it doesnt sound as narly as shred and destory but can convey a similar idea that you are trying to get across.

Site looks good and all the pictures loaded for me. nice site good luck with it

 

[1Fast68]

I think you should put the note about professional / intermediate tours on the Rates page, not the calendar page. Just a thought. I saw the rates and had to go back and figure out the difference between the two.

 

[the fix-it guy]

Looks good, everything worked for me. Possible verbage changes have all ready been pointed out.

 

[zalez]

My thoughts:

Site looks good!
Maybe combine homepage with news page. Home page will get the most views and if there is any exciting news or something you want the visitor to see, put it there.
The lodge picture could be compressed some for loading speed.
The bottom navigation threw me off. It is usually meant for the links that don't get used much. It's not bad having it down there, just not normal. Also with the new browsers and how their status popups are on the bottom, some of the site links get covered up (depending on what side you are mousing over). Just kind of unsightly (not your fault though).

These are just some thoughts. Site looks good

 

[Jorli]

Thanks, some good suggestions here. The site has already had a number of revisions made to it, after a while it gets difficult to edit your own work so I appreciate the input everyone has given. I'll work on the verbiage of "shred" and "destroy" (but I actually used to be a snowboarder, some of the lingo is hard to shake)

Are you guys using PCs or Macs? I ask because I wonder if some PCs are not accepting the formating and I use Mac so I only see what I see.

Thanks!-J

 

[Demo250]

I'm using a PC and it loaded perfectly. I tried it with all 3 browsers as well and the formatting was accepted and displayed correctly with all 3. (Firefox, IE, and Chrome)

Some very minor things I noticed... just a couple very small suggestions. On the crew page:

"Cory Micku is Canada’s version of Chris Burandt……….on a few more cups of coffee-if you know what we mean."

Would change that to:

Cory Micku is Canada’s version of Chris Burandt…… on a few more cups of coffee - if you know what we mean! (Added a space after the periods, (and took a few out) and before and after the "-" Makes it easier to read in my opinion and just looks a little neater. Exclamation mark - optional.)

Brad grew up in Pemberton and knows where all the best riding spots in the area.

Would change to:

Brad grew up in Pemberton and knows where all the best riding spots are in the area. (added the word "are" so it makes more sense)
or
Brad grew up in Pemberton and knows all the best riding spots in the area. (removed the word "where")

Jorli is a well-rounded snowmobiler and loves to share his experiences and adventures, his credits include Wilderness First Aid and Level 1 Avalanche Operations.

to

Jorli is a well-rounded snowmobiler who loves to share his experiences and adventures; his credits include Wilderness First Aid and Level 1 Avalanche Operations.

(Changed comma to semicolon and, "and" to "who." Sorry, I know most people don't care about grammar and would never notice. Also, consider the word "certifications," over credits. Sounds more professional, maybe?)

I know you are probably reading this and saying... who cares? But hey, I told you they were very small suggestions.

The site looks great though. I don't have any other suggestions.

 

[Demo250]

Oh and as for the critiqued home page as mentioned earlier. I'll give you my revisions on that as well.

Shred limitless powder on massive glaciers in the high alpine, destroy terrain-riddled sub-alpine and navigate wicked old growth trees to elevate your boondocking skills, the adventure is literally endless.

Changed to:

Roll through limitless powder on massive glaciers in the high alpine, shred the terrain-riddled sub-alpine and navigate wicked old growth trees to elevate your boondocking skills; the adventure is literally endless.

(I know I re-used shred... but it was a way of removing the word with the more serious implications in "destroy.")

Edit: Or borrowing the word "link" from bholmlate.

Roll through limitless powder on massive glaciers in the high alpine, link epic lines in the terrain-riddled sub-alpine and navigate wicked old growth trees to elevate your boondocking skills; the adventure is literally endless.

 

[jzanc532]

The bottom navigation definitely threw me off, its not bad but would be a lot easier to navigate if it was at the top of the page or on the side. Other than that it looks very good!

 

[Jorli]

I've taken note. Ouch! Getting schooled by a 20 year old on grammar...... next draft will get graded and corrected by my high school English teacher before it goes up.....or better yet, I'll get someone else to do all the writing. Do you want a job?

I'm using a PC and it loaded perfectly. I tried it with all 3 browsers as well and the formatting was accepted and displayed correctly with all 3. (Firefox, IE, and Chrome)

Some very minor things I noticed... just a couple very small suggestions. On the crew page:

"Cory Micku is Canada’s version of Chris Burandt……….on a few more cups of coffee-if you know what we mean."

Would change that to:

Cory Micku is Canada’s version of Chris Burandt…… on a few more cups of coffee - if you know what we mean! (Added a space after the periods, (and took a few out) and before and after the "-" Makes it easier to read in my opinion and just looks a little neater. Exclamation mark - optional.)

Brad grew up in Pemberton and knows where all the best riding spots in the area.

Would change to:

Brad grew up in Pemberton and knows where all the best riding spots are in the area. (added the word "are" so it makes more sense)
or
Brad grew up in Pemberton and knows all the best riding spots in the area. (removed the word "where")

Jorli is a well-rounded snowmobiler and loves to share his experiences and adventures, his credits include Wilderness First Aid and Level 1 Avalanche Operations.

to

Jorli is a well-rounded snowmobiler who loves to share his experiences and adventures; his credits include Wilderness First Aid and Level 1 Avalanche Operations.

(Changed comma to semicolon and, "and" to "who." Sorry, I know most people don't care about grammar and would never notice. Also, consider the word "certifications," over credits. Sounds more professional, maybe?)

I know you are probably reading this and saying... who cares? But hey, I told you they were very small suggestions.

The site looks great though. I don't have any other suggestions.

 

[bwylde]

Looks good-everything loaded fine for me. As a matter of fact i may have to consider booking something for next season!

 

[WatchThis!!!]

Maybe some pictures and videos of your guys...show people what they can do. Otherwise looks great!

 

[Matte Murder]

Nice page. I would put the nav tabs(at the bottom now) in a different color than gray. I can see them but the older, less webby people may miss them. And put them at the top or stacked on the sides(top is better).

 

[Jorli]

We tried different locations on the Nav tabs and it didn't look right with the way the page was structured with the background skins. That is probably something I won't look at changing in the short term because I would have to re-shape the entire site and figure out another template. Right now, its not in the budget. I'll test some other font size and colors on the nav tabs and see if there an appropriate fit.

Thanks-J

Nice page. I would put the nav tabs(at the bottom now) in a different color than gray. I can see them but the older, less webby people may miss them. And put them at the top or stacked on the sides(top is better).

 

[Demo250]

I've taken note. Ouch! Getting schooled by a 20 year old on grammar...... next draft will get graded and corrected by my high school English teacher before it goes up.....or better yet, I'll get someone else to do all the writing. Do you want a job?

Hey now, you aren't giving our fine school systems enough credit. Lol!
But seriously, other than those couple little things, everything is good to go in my opinion.